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| Unmasked myself on that cloudy day. |
Amidst the masses, my cerulean self feels rejected
May be I knew of the convulsions which followed
Or maybe I did not, but I have to be reticent nevertheless.
Standing still at the carfax amongst the buzzing crowd
I feel a cataclysm within me, only that it is not loud
I’m not dumb and I see all of it, but I have to be reticent nevertheless.
To lead an august life was never my intent
Neither was an abased one marked with a dent
May be it's meant to be that way, but I have to be reticent nevertheless.
A daedal voice from within tells me all is not over
I wait for my spaceship for I can depart and hover
I realize now, home or not, I have to be reticent nevertheless.
The air, the dead and the living seem hoary
Not bewildering at all, for this is my story
Here or there it’s all the same ‘cos I have to be reticent nevertheless.
For the revebrating voice tells me, ‘You're alone, the only one
You're not meant for any of these, you're meant for none'.
The only recluse is me and the shoulder’s my own.
There’s no nevertheless here for I now know I have to be reticent for times to come.
~~Peace
R.o.H.i.T....
36 comments:
Hmmmm..
powerful voice, thanks for sharing.
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great piece of expression..
a job creatively done.
snap outa ya dream b-)
n like i'd said, a nice poem nonetheless :D
That's a beautiful use of words to depict emotions, I think it's powerful...
love it.
well done.
Wonderful enigmatic write...
Hohoho,
What charming poetry you have posted here.
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Cheers.
Hope to see you in.
Happy Writing..
xoxox
Very well done and being snapped out of your dream powerful
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I have to be reticent for times to come.
So nicely stated.
written so well, and yet the emotions expressed feel so stark and I hesitate to let them seep in because i fear the hopelessness, but poetry is about expression... and this a excellently expressed! xx
This is very dense... and very powerful.
nice one :) keep writing
who-am-i-waiting?
tight, well put.
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Thanks a ton for the beautiful entry and active participation.
Strong words, well written.
That was too hard for me to understand in one go..
but yet i read and re read and finally whatever i could make out..it was a piece of high intellect i suppose :)
Nice.
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Excellent write!
keep it up.
Wow. Sad, sad. : (
you have a unique rhyming scheme in this work.
sometimes i wondered if there are aliens living amongst us. :)
very interesting pacing and vocabulary
Great word choice throughout!
a tale told beautifully thank you x
I could relate to this poem completely. I feel that many poets have deep emotions that they can easily pour onto the page yet find difficult to share verbally. This is why they become great writers. I could see this in the conflict from beginning to end. Altogether, a fascinating write. Thank you!
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beautiful,
Thanks for sharing your talent with poetry picnic.
Hope to see you tomorrow.
...hardly reticent. we got snippets, just enough to tantalize before the speaker would turn reticent on us.
clever piece.
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